tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8652020746892759821.post4896437927652030152..comments2023-03-28T05:27:10.415-04:00Comments on An Ordinary Japanese Mom's Diary: What do you want for Christmas?Mhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04953459416346536609noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8652020746892759821.post-23489793507746850502015-12-08T16:19:04.257-05:002015-12-08T16:19:04.257-05:00Thank you Terry!
I've finished correcting them...Thank you Terry!<br />I've finished correcting them. I always appreciate you.Mhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04953459416346536609noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8652020746892759821.post-54809444223751823762015-12-08T11:21:51.814-05:002015-12-08T11:21:51.814-05:00Another very good post Kumi-san, and the kickboard...Another very good post Kumi-san, and the kickboard looks very fun. Similar to a skateboard and scooter. No serious issues found with writing style, only small things. Listed below:<br /><br />This line:<br />We found a rare event in Christmas there.<br /><br />Should probably be:<br />We found a rare Christmas event in there.<br /><br />This line:<br />It was to write a message using a small square paper to Santa Claus and hang it on the Christmas tree.<br /><br />Is usually written as:<br />It was to write a message using a small square of paper to Santa Claus and hang it on the Christmas tree.<br /><br />Reason: as far as I know what you wrote was not wrong, but for reasons I do not know we always seem to write it as small square of paper when we are going to do something with it rather than just describing the paper.<br /><br />This line:<br />(Tanabata is one of the Japanese traditional event. We write our wishes on colorful paper strips and hang them on bamboo leaves on the night of 7th July.)<br /><br />Should be:<br />(Tanabata is one of the Japanese traditional customs. We write our wishes on colorful paper strips and hang them on bamboo leaves on the night of 7th July.)<br /><br />Or:<br />(Tanabata is a traditional Japanese custom. We write our wishes on colorful paper strips and hang them on bamboo leaves on the night of 7th July.)<br /><br />This line:<br />"If I can't read your letter, Santa-san also will not be able to read and he will not understand what you want."<br /><br />Should probably be (and definitely is a work of parental genius to get your childs writing improved :) )<br />"If I can't read your letter, Santa-san also will not be able to read it, and he will not understand what you want."<br /><br />This line:<br />They still believe the existance of Santa Claus.<br /><br />Should probably be:<br />They still believe in the existance of Santa Claus.<br /><br />Or (more often said in this shorter form when santa existing is implied.):<br />They still believe in Santa Claus.Terry Wallworkhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15175573589082853160noreply@blogger.com