tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8652020746892759821.post8472159207731774928..comments2023-03-28T05:27:10.415-04:00Comments on An Ordinary Japanese Mom's Diary: My ideal motherMhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04953459416346536609noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8652020746892759821.post-59048308835942969062016-01-27T05:13:26.330-05:002016-01-27T05:13:26.330-05:00Hello Kumi-san,
Yes your rewritten sentence is cl...Hello Kumi-san,<br /><br />Yes your rewritten sentence is clearer in meaning<br /><br />I rewrote it a little to correct a slight issue:<br /><br />This line:<br />"You two, no one in the world can play it with you for such a long time! Maybe your grandma is an only one person who can put up with it!"<br /><br />Should be:<br />"You two, no one in the world can play it with you for such a long time! Maybe your grandma is the only person who can put up with it!"<br /><br />Reason: When you are refering to a person and that person is the only person you are speaking about then you don't need to include how many people you are refering to.<br /><br />So for example: Only one person would be Only person (Only person in this case makes clear that it only applies to one specific person)Terry Wallworkhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15175573589082853160noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8652020746892759821.post-15338668274150661932016-01-26T20:20:36.953-05:002016-01-26T20:20:36.953-05:00Thank you always Terry!
I am sorry that I am late ...Thank you always Terry!<br />I am sorry that I am late for correcting them after you gave me these advice.<br /><br />I rewrote this sentence, how about it?<br /><br />This line: I am unable to interpret what the meaning is:<br />"You two, no grandma in the world will not play together so for a long time! Maybe only your patient grandma will!"<br /><br />rewrote sentence: <br /><br />"You two, no one in the world can play it with you for such a long time! Maybe your grandma is an only one person who can put up with it!"<br /><br />Mhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04953459416346536609noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8652020746892759821.post-14154209151502317152016-01-17T14:10:59.354-05:002016-01-17T14:10:59.354-05:00Hello Kumi-san,
It seems your mother is very good...Hello Kumi-san,<br /><br />It seems your mother is very good at keeping children calm and engaged, still this should not be a surprise for you mother has had a lot more practice :)<br /><br />Here is a list of issues found while reading your post:<br /><br />This line:<br />I wrote that my 7-year-old son have had a flu since last Saturday's night.<br /><br />Should be:<br />I wrote that my 7-year-old son has had flu since last Saturday night.<br /><br />This line:<br />Donjyara is a picture matching game like mah‐jongg and it has been loved by Japanese families for a long time.<br /><br />Should be:<br />Donjyara is a picture matching game like mah‐jong and it has been loved by Japanese families for a long time.<br /><br />Reason: In English mah-jong is usually spelt with a single g rather than the gg ending (though your spelling is not wrong).<br /><br />This line:<br />Since my 7-year-old son likes playing it very much, so I thought my son and my mother might be able to kill time to play it.<br /><br />Should be:<br />Since my 7-year-old son likes playing it very much, I thought my son and my mother might be able to kill time playing it.<br /><br />This line:<br />"You are really patient! If I were you, I could not keep playing it such a long time!"<br /><br />Should be:<br />"You are really patient! If I were you, I could not keep playing it for such a long time!"<br /><br />This line: I am unable to interpret what the meaning is:<br />"You two, no grandma in the world will not play together so for a long time! Maybe only your patient grandma will!"<br /><br />This line:<br />I told my children but they didn't hear me because they were absorbed to playing it.<br /><br />Should be:<br />I told my children but they didn't hear me because they were absorbed in playing it.<br /><br />This line:<br />Whenever I recall my mother, she was always smiling to me.<br /><br />Should be:<br />Whenever I recall my mother, she was always smiling at me.Terry Wallworkhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15175573589082853160noreply@blogger.com