tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8652020746892759821.post3577232595179185626..comments2023-03-28T05:27:10.415-04:00Comments on An Ordinary Japanese Mom's Diary: Our first Halloween in the USMhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04953459416346536609noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8652020746892759821.post-60037851709913216462018-11-30T13:16:59.910-05:002018-11-30T13:16:59.910-05:00Part 2:
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They decorated their houses an...Part 2:<br /><br />This line:<br />They decorated their houses and gardens with spider web, skeleton, witches, scarecrows, ghosts, and so on.<br /><br />Should be:<br />They decorated their houses and gardens with spider webs, skeletons, witches, scarecrows, ghosts, and so on.<br /><br />This line:<br />They kept the manners well.<br /><br />Should be:<br />They (were well mannered/acted with good manners).<br /><br />This line:<br />There was a sign that they didn't turn off the entrance light and the people didn't ring the bell of those people. <br /><br />Should be:<br />There was a sign that said if the entrance light was not turned on that they should not ring the bell of those people.<br /><br />Question: It that what you intended to mean in the sentence above?<br /><br />This line:<br />I like the generosity which admit the differences.<br /><br />Should be:<br />I like the consideration shown to those who are different.Terry Wallworkhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15175573589082853160noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8652020746892759821.post-67911804892900097212018-11-30T13:15:14.456-05:002018-11-30T13:15:14.456-05:00Hello Kumi,
You and your children seemed to have ...Hello Kumi,<br /><br />You and your children seemed to have enjoyed you first Halloween in the US. In England Halloween is not a big as it is in the US, however it is growing in importance and will likely be just a big and important here as it is in the US.<br /><br />Next year you could show the American children what Japanese 飴 is like.<br /><br />Here are a list of issues found in your post:<br /><br />Part 1:<br /><br />This line:<br />I went to see the Halloween parade held in my children's elementary in the afternoon on Oct 31.<br /><br />Should be:<br />I went to see the Halloween parade held in my children's elementary school in the afternoon on Oct 31.<br /><br />This line:<br />I prepared treats for children at home and my husband took care of it.<br /><br />Should be:<br />I prepared treats for children at home and my husband (handed them out to children/took care of it).<br /><br />This line:<br />He called me that they were all gone at 7pm because a lot of children came to our house for trick-or-treating.<br /><br />Should be:<br />He called to tell me that they were all gone by 7pm because a lot of children came to our house for trick-or-treating.<br /><br />This line:<br />I asked him to give them our stock of snack.<br /><br />Should be:<br />I asked him to give them our stock of snacks.<br /><br />This line:<br />I only had an image that Halloween is just a costume parade, young people all gather Shibuya with creepy makeups and they didn't have any rules and manners, sometimes caused the troubles.<br /><br />Should be:<br />I only had an image that Halloween is just a costume parade, young people all gather in Shibuya wearing creepy makeup and costumes, they didn't have any rules or manners, this sometimes caused trouble.<br /><br />This line:<br />I changed my image of Halloween completely changed.<br /><br />Should be:<br />I changed my image of Halloween completely.<br /><br />Or:<br />My image of Halloween has changed completely.Terry Wallworkhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15175573589082853160noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8652020746892759821.post-43798325055234155222018-11-30T12:58:41.488-05:002018-11-30T12:58:41.488-05:00This comment has been removed by the author.Terry Wallworkhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15175573589082853160noreply@blogger.com