I bought chocolate for my kids and husband while there, even though it was a little early for Valentine's day, because all of us had a day off yesterday and we were having a relaxing time.
In Japan, it is common that women give chocolate to men on Valentine's day.
I gave a box of chocolate to my husband.
He said with a grin:
"Thank you! But... I know. You only want to eat them by yourself, don't you?"
"Oh, busted!"
I grinned at him and said:
"All right, let's eat them together. Would you like a cup of coffee? Hey, Dad said you can eat the chocolate!"
"Yeah!"
Our children were glad and came to the table.
We enjoyed our time together eating the chocolate.
Thank you(^o^) for reading this article!
thank you for sharing your memories...
ReplyDeleteThank you for the comment!
DeleteHello Kumi-san,
ReplyDeleteThere are not many things that are more fun than eating chocolates. I am glad that you had an enjoyable Valentine's Day.
Here is a list of some of the issues with the rest of the post:
This line:
I went shopping to the supermarket with my children yesterday.
Would be better worded:
I went to the supermarket to do some shopping with my children yesterday.
This line:
I bought chocolate for my kids and husband there even though it was a little early for Valentine's day, because all of us had a day off yesterday and we were having a relax time.
Should be:
I bought chocolate for my kids and husband while there, even though it was a little early for Valentine's day, because all of us had a day off yesterday and we were having a relaxing time.
This line:
He said with grinning:
Should be:
He said (while grinning/with a grin):
This line:
I grinned to him and said:
Should be:
I grinned at him and said:
Reason: You can use "to" but at sounds better with that phrase.
This line:
"All right, let's eat together. Would you like a cup of coffee? Hey, Dad said you can eat the chocolate!"
Should be:
"All right, let's eat them together. Would you like a cup of coffee? Hey, Dad said you can eat the chocolate!"
This line:
Our children were glad and come to the table.
Should be:
Our children were glad and came to the table.
Or:
Our children were glad and decided to come to the table.
This line:
We enjoyed the chocolate time.
Should be:
We enjoyed our time together eating the chocolate.
Thank you Terry!
DeleteI have a question about this correction;
Should be:
I bought chocolate for my kids and husband while there,
Does this "while" mean "while we were at the supermarket"?
Yes it is a form of sentence abbreviation.
DeleteIt relies on the fact that you already mentioned where "their" was, the supermarket.
Examples:
I went to the clinic, while I was at the clinic I talked to a nurse.
I went to the clinic, while there I talked to a nurse.
It acts to make a sentence shorter and less repetitive.
Oop "their" I should have typed "there".
ReplyDeleteI see.
DeleteThank you Terry!