8/06/2016

Hiroshima marks the 71th aniversary of the atomic bombing

Our family watched Hiroshima Peace Memorial Ceremony broadcast on TV yesterday morning.

We try to watch it and observe a moment of silence for victims on the morning of August 6th every year.

My 6-year-old daughter didn't understand the meaning and refused to observe a moment of silence, but my husband made her do it.

She started crying.

I hope she will understand the meaning someday.

I've been to Hiroshima Peace Memorial Museum once.

I felt the oppressive and gloomy atmosphere as if I could not laugh forever.

But I thought it was my duty as a Japanese person to face the reality which happend during World War 2.

I'm going to try to teach my children how important peace is.




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2 comments:

  1. Hello Kumi-san,

    Moments of silence no matter the reason for young children are always a difficult thing for them to do. Still with age she will understand.

    Here is a list of other issues found with the rest of the post:

    This line:
    Hiroshima marks 71th aniversary of the atomic bombing

    Should be:
    Hiroshima marks the 71st anniversary of the atomic bombing

    Reason: 1. Added filler word "the" to make sentence sound more natural. 2. 71th should be 71st. Numbers that end in 1 use st as the ending apart from when the ending number is nn11 when you use th.

    Examples:

    1st
    11th
    21st
    111th (end in 11 so uses th)
    341st
    342311th (end in 11 so uses th)

    Reason: 3. Spelling mistake fixed anniversary.

    This line:
    Our family watched Hiroshima Peace Memorial Ceremony broadcasted on TV yesterday morning.

    Should be:
    Our family watched Hiroshima Peace Memorial Ceremony broadcast on TV yesterday morning.

    Reason: Changed "broadcasted" to "broadcast" as this is the correct way to use that word as used in your sentence.

    This line:
    My 6-year-old daughter didn't understand the meaning and denied to observe a moment of silence, but my husband made her do it.

    Should be:
    My 6-year-old daughter didn't understand the meaning and (objected to observing/declined to observe/would not observe/refused to observe) a moment of silence, but my husband made her do it.

    Reason: "Denied" would not be used in such a way in the sentence as you had written it. I cant really give you a rule as to when it is correct to use Denied but I can show some valid examples:

    My daughter denied that she had eaten the cake.
    I denied my son access to the computer.
    I denied entry to the airport as my passport was damaged.
    They denied that they had seen anything.

    Note: Denied is generally used when you or someone else is prevented from doing or having something usually by someone else. But if you yourself are the one preventing yourself from doing something then Denied is generally not used (though there are exceptions, see below for examples):

    Examples:
    I want the cake buy I will have to deny myself.
    I would not be denied the cake.

    This line:
    But I thought it was my duty as one of Japanese to face the reality which happend during World War 2.

    Should be:
    But I thought it was my duty as a Japanese person to face the reality which happened during World War 2.

    Or:
    As a Japanese person I thought it was my duty to face the reality which happened during World War 2.

    Or:
    But I thought it was my duty to face the reality which happened during World War 2. (This version omits Japanese and uses only context to imply meaning).

    This line:
    I'm going to try to teach my children how important the peace is.

    Should be:
    I'm going to try to teach my children how important peace is.

    Reason: Changed "the peace" to "peace"

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    1. Thank you for detailed explanation how to use "deny"!

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