My work sift is until 4pm but I worked overtime until 4:35pm yesterday.
Since I thought I would not be in time to pick my children up, I called the children's house and the nursery school to inform them I would be late.
While I was driving, I started to feel sick and it gradually got worse.
When I arrived at the children's house, I had a strong headache and I almost threw up.
But I had to bear it because I also had to pick up my 5-year-old daughter to the nursery school.
We could come home at last.
After I took the laundry in, I told my children:
"I am going to get some sleep now. I feel sick. Finish what you have to do first, OK?"
I spread the futon in a Japanese-style room and went to sleep.
But I heard my children were talking.
My daughter said:
"I want to eat this!"
My 6-year-old son said:
"Are you sure that you can eat this? Did you ask mom?"
She said:
"Mom said I can eat this before."
"But it was before, right? You should ask mom now!"
I heard my daughter coming,
"Mom, can I eat this dried cuttlefish?"
"Yeah, OK."
I answered.
After that, my 6-year-old son came and said:
"I want to eat Coco-kun!"
Coco-kun is like cereal and we need put them on a plate and pour some milk on them.
"You can do it by yourself. Try it!"
I answered.
After a while, my son came again and said:
"Mom, I already had Coco-kun, but can I eat one more candy?"
"Think and deal with it by yourself! Please let me sleep!"
After I woke up, it was already 7:40pm.
As a Mom I should not get sick.
The living room was messy with my children's toys and my son's textbooks and notebooks.
I had to do much housework after I woke up,
Health must be your first consideration in whatever you do.
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Another good post Kumi-san. I hope you feel better soon.
ReplyDeleteI read the post for any writing issues. Only small issues were found.
This line:
My working sift is until 4pm but I worked overtime until 4:35pm yesterday.
Should probably be:
My work shift is until 4pm but I worked overtime until 4:35pm yesterday.
This line:
While I was driving, I felt sick little by little.
Would sound more natural as:
While I was driving, I started to feel sick and it gradually got worse.
This line:
But I had to bear it because I also had to pick my 5-year-old daughter to the nursery school.
Should probably be:
But I had to bear it because I also had to pick up my 5-year-old daughter from the nursery school.
This line:
After I took the laundry in, I told my children,
Should probably be:
After I took the laundry in, I told my children:
This line:
"I am going to get some sleep from now. I feel sick. Finish what you have to do first, OK?"
Should probably be:
"I am going to get some sleep now. I feel sick. Finish what you have to do first, OK?"
This line:
I spread futon in a Japanese-style room and went to sleep.
Should probably be:
I spread (a/the) futon in the Japanese-style room and went to sleep.
This line:
My daughter said,
Should probably be:
My daughter said:
This line:
My 6-year-old son said,
Should probably be:
My 6-year-old son said:
This line:
She said,
Should probably be:
She said:
This line:
I heard my daughter was coming,
Should probably be:
I heard my daughter coming:
This line:
After that, my 6-year-old son came and said,
Should probably be:
After that, my 6-year-old son came and said:
This line:
Coco-kun is like cereal and we need put them on the plate and pour some milk on them.
Should probably be:
Coco-kun is like cereal and we need put them on a plate and pour some milk on them.
This line:
After a while, my son came again and said,
Should probably be:
After a while, my son came again and said:
This line:
Mom should not get sick.
Could be rewritten as:
A Mom should not get sick
Or:
Moms should not get sick.
Or (If you specifically mean that you as the mother should not get sick, rather than moms in general you could write):
As a Mom I should not get sick
This line:
I had to do too many housework after I woke up,
Should probably be:
I had much housework to do after I woke up.
As always Kumi-san interesting article, hope you are now fully recovered.
Thank you Terry.
DeleteI have a question.
When I write sentences told by someone, should I use : instead of , ?
The way you wrote it from what I could infer was that you would refer to someone or something or topic on one line and then start a new line and type the response.
ReplyDeleteFor example:
My children always ask me questions like,
"Why is the sky blue?"
You were using a comma , to terminate/end the line and typing the reply on the next line. When you write a sentence on one line and on a separte line you write more information about that topic you generally use a colon:
For example:
My children are always asking me questions:
"Mom, why is the sky blue?"
When the colon is used at the end of a line it can indicate what follows underneath it is in some way related.
Another way the : colon can be used is for lists:
Today I went shopping I bought:
Cheese
Eggs
Milk
Etc....
You generally don't have to use the colon unless you start a new line.
For example you could say:
My children are always asking questions like "Mom why is the sky blue".
On separate lines it would go back to:
Cake is awesome my children tell me:
"Mom we like cake!"
The colon can be used even if what follows on the next line isn't a direct quote.
For example:
The weather today has been unimpressive:
It rained, snowed and the street was flooded with water.
It can also be used for quotes:
President Abe said:
"A strong economy is the key to attaining our goals......"
The colon allows you to isolate a line on its own so it stands out so that you don't have to have it all in one long paragrah.
So in summary the colon : it can come at the end of a sentence and indicate what is on the next line is in someway related. It can be used to indicate the start of lists, and quotes, and allows you to put important lines on their own line to make to more readable.
Also bear in mind that an English grammar teacher may not give or even agree with my way of using the colon, but it is the only way I have ever seen it used.
I will see if I can find some good example websites using the colon so you can see more easily than I am able to explain.
Hello again Kumi-san.
ReplyDeleteI searched the web and this page seems to have a simple explanation:
http://www.grammarly.com/handbook/punctuation/colon/
Hello Terry.
DeleteIn fact, I didn't know how to use colon at all because we were not taught it at school.
I think I could understand the meaning, but I don't really have much confidence whether I would be able to use it properly.
I also searched about it on Japanese websites.
I could find several websites which refer to how to use colon.
In my case, when I want to write the words someone said, does it mean it is quoting?
Thank you for searching the website of its explanation!
The colon can be used for quoting like this:
DeleteMy children always say: "We like reading books."
Or:
My children always say:
"We like reading books."
Both of the forms above are quotes that use the colon.
But it is possible to do quotes without using the colon.
The " " characters that enclose what was quoted are called speech marks or quote marks. They have the same meaing as your Japanese 「」(at least I think the do unless I am incorrect).
So if you wanted to quote what someone had said without using the colon you could have a sentence like:
It was reported that Mr Tanaka the politician said "I like all children and will pass a law so that all children get free candy."
It's the " " characters in this case that indicate that the text inside them is a quote or someone speaking.
The colon has other uses however and does not have to mean that what follows it is a quote. But it is almost certain that if you see a colon followed by " " then it's likely a quote.
Though I should say that what I know about the colon is all information I have seen while writing and speaking English natively, I have not had it directly explained to me in a formal sense (at least not that I can remember).
If I am misinterpreting what your asking Kumi-san please let me know.